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I could not tell you why by `poisonedrose:iconpoisonedrose:





I drove towards the black-grey clouds
with my shoulders bare and browned,
the front windows down.

Fat beads spread across the windshield –
the thunder was drowned by the volume
of songs that I shared with the grey;

when the wind spoke I let my elbow
catch chilled sulphur, left my right half
in awe when the rain told me it is true:

that as I drive with one hand sifting
through my dampened hair, only the yellow
element will ever love my skin so,

and were I to return home to dry earths and honesty,
I would be the soot that offends
and finds no place amid the clean –

only among the precipitate of coffee scented storms
could I become those sulphurous yellows
while I chase the grey, search for home.
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:iconpardonm3:
Your writing is delicious... it reminds me of Indian classical music.
:iconjadisofeternity:
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i used this on my random search journal feature thing. thank you.

really good poetry, I'll try to check out the rest of your gallery someday

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:shamrock: "with God all things are possible" :shamrock:
:iconpoisonedrose:
Thank you, that's really nice of you. :)

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-- J :butterfly:

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:iconpoisonedrose:
Thank you! Perhaps it has been an influence :)

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:iconclippers0507:
I love your descriptions. Such a throwback to classic writings without being overbearing (which is usually the case when people attempt this style). Thanks for not going overboard, saying "black-grey"... Love the simplicity yet detail. :heart: x 1000 = :w00t:

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My boy, if silence is golden, you are bankrupt. -
Charlie Chan
:iconpoisonedrose:
Thank you! Although, I don't know what style this is meant to be - I didn't realise it was classical. I just sorta wrote, y'know? :slow: Hence I just put it into general poetry and left it at that. I have no clue haha.

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:icondecarabia69:
Very nicely written, Joban and I always appreciate the use of sensory input throughout your work. :)

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"A work of art which did not begin in emotion is not art." ~ Paul Cézanne
:icondecarabia69:
Your very welcome, and thank YOU for sharing! :)

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"A work of art which did not begin in emotion is not art." ~ Paul Cézanne

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