Upon unearthing the dreams locked in Mother's saris:
not so impulsive
wearing a plain petticoat,
mother has me ready when
our bare hands purge lengths of cloth, lengths of cloth
swirling around our hands
from the bowels of the iron clasp trunk.
dress up time:
mother hooks she tugs she wraps
she wraps I twirl, centrifuging
between her hands.
I am the twirling centrifuge
a pallet of vanadium oxides winding
around my waist in
mustard. mendhi. vanda. topaz. lotus.
flushing roses against cobalt blue hips;
opaque iron (III), the brick red blouse;
the soft pink veil, like
delicate floral hexaaquamanganese
on net; I spin mother wraps me,
a test tube mannequin,
in wet coppers, deep blue sulphates,
pleated orange peels, lemon zests of chromium;
zinc doves fluttering against my skin,
the turbulent silk
rises to my oesophagus
until I pause.
catch breath.
mother pins three pins,
she orbits, I orbit.
we are yes
volatile,
but we never rust.

















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"A work of art which did not begin in emotion is not art." ~ Paul Cézanne
the racy movement makes it very enjoyable.
and it is is very communicative, visually too - at least to my Indian eye.
the tenderness, the forever-mystique-for-me of mother-daughter relationship is wonderfully portrayed with the heritage symbol of sari.
I am afraid I am not competrent about the technicalities of syntax.
[And, no criticism but more an observation , so take it in the right spirit - use of word 'bowels' three times in the first few lines, jars to me.]
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Simon
Smile and the whole world smiles with you
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Mother-daughter relationships are just amazing when they're cultivated with care! It's the smallest, most insignificant moments that seem to mean the most.
I see what you mean about the 'bowels' thing. I was messing around with repetition, but that could be something to tweak so that it flows more smoothly.
Thank you for all of that.
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Simon
Smile and the whole world smiles with you
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"A work of art which did not begin in emotion is not art." ~ Paul Cézanne
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-- J
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"A work of art which did not begin in emotion is not art." ~ Paul Cézanne
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